2 Matching Contest - Angsty Haiku - Favorites
Fall 2012 • Millikin University
faded tattoo Austin Brettshneider |
thick makeup Skya Gentle |
kissing in the park Ryan Fraedrich |
lean in close Austin Myers |
thick makeup |
kissing in the park |
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thick makeup top quarter champion |
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TOP half Chamption I get to see her
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bottom quarter champion I get to see her |
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I get to see her |
an ocean away |
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I get to see her Rob Spurling |
he likes her Geoffrey Eggleston |
mother gone Christopher Potter |
an ocean away Danielle Mohrbach |
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TOP half champion I get to see her
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CHAMPION I get to see her
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love letters BOTTOM half champion |
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hasty love poems Danielle Mohrbach |
single rose Hannah Gifford |
icy rain Skya Gentle |
love letters Danielle Mohrbach |
hasty love poems |
love letters |
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love letters top quarter champion |
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BOTTOM half champion love letters
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bottom quarter champion she comes back drunk |
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she comes back drunk |
I find my name |
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she comes back drunk Rob Spurling |
Tuesday night R Nicole |
I find my name Austin Myers |
the band-aid Ryan Fraedrich |
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hasty love poems |
single rose |
thick makeup |
Tuesday night |
I like this match because both of the are about near rejection but have a small possibility of home. The first poem is about a person tearing up their badly written love poems. it seems to be about this person tearing up the poems in anger, but it could be for an entirely different reason. They could have finally gotten over this person, or they could have finally written the perfect poem to them. More obviously, in the other person the word maybe seems to be a nicer way of saying no, but there is the faint, almost impossible chance that it means yes. Skya |
As terrible as this sounds, this is the first pair I thought of. I pictured a terrible excuse of a man getting drunk with his friends. Then getting home on a Tuesday night and hitting his girlfriend, who then decides she has had enough. I think these two would accurately describe the cowardice of a man like that, as well as the strength the woman should have. Nobody deserves to be treated that way and she should leave. I can just feel the strength and defiance in the woman, while picturing the careless, pitiful excuse of a man. Ryan |
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I find my name |
the band-aid |
she comes back drunk |
I find my name |
I really liked this pair, because they both feel painful. The top one just has this heavy hit to it, like a giant weight. The second one isn’t as painful. It makes me think of getting broken up with over a text message, which sucks. It’s super painful but only briefly, then there’s a residual pain afterwards that’s just there but kind of annoying but not a crushing weight. This was probably the most depressing pair and the most emotional pair and most clearly defined emotional context. Rob |
I feel as though both of these haiku could be about the same girl. I picture a well-put-together guy who can have fun while handling life being burdened by the wild side of his depressed girlfriend, who likes to get drunk and/or high all the time. He could be staying in on a Friday or Saturday night, because he has to work early the next day. If it weren't for that, he'd be out with his girlfriend. Being emotional, she might get belligerently drunk, because she is mad at him for not going out with her. Naturally, that would ruin his night when she comes back to his residence. The second one connects, because she could realize her continuous drunkenness and out-of-control actions are nothing but a burden to her boyfriend, who despite everything, she still loves deeply. So, being depressed and emotional, she decides to commit suicide, only after leaving him a suicide note. Both haiku are good in my opinion, and I find it very interesting how well they both link up. If the order in which I put them is viewed as chronological, a feeling of disgust and sadness is maintained over the whole story told by these two haiku. I feel as though he calls it "summer love" because the relationship was intended to be a very positive thing at the beginning of the summer but his girlfriend threw it away, due to the problems she was having. Seth |
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he likes her |
rainy day |
kissing in the dark |
every day |
I wanted these haiku to be paired together so bad. I read "rainy day" first and immediately thought of my haiku "she likes him." I have been in both of these situations more times than I am willing to admit. Some of the lines are interchangeable between the two to achieve similar effects. The last line of "rainy day" could easily replace the last line of "she likes him." The situations are almost exactly the same. Geoffrey |
What a contrast! The first haiku made me laugh out loud the first time it was read (and most of the subsequent times I read it). Such an experience is universal. I never had a serious boyfriend until I came to college, and, up until then, either was disdainful or desperate for love. If I was feeling either way particularly strongly, the sight of happy couples could make me roll my eyes, pout, or weep for my sad, lonely existence. Even now that I'm in a wonderful relationship, I tend to scoff at couples who far too publically display their affection. However, the second haiku is something that I haven't experienced, but is still deeply affecting. I can't imagine the pain one would feel if they had to repeatedly see a former significant other with a new boyfriend or girlfriend. The memories of their former love and happiness would inevitably come back to haunt them each and every day. I love that the first haiku is silly, and the other, somber, and yet they both have an undeniable angst. Danielle M |
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love letters |
I find my name |
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I pictured a gruesome tale of a woman who was writing letters to a lover of hers from college. He moved around a lot because of his fathers job and so they never stayed in one place too long. She sent him letters as often as possible, direly waiting for responses from him. Unfortunately he stopped receiving the mail. Caught by distress at the fact she was no longer receive replies from her lover, she sunk into deep depression. Then one summer, he goes to visit her finally. Upon coming to the doorstep of his former lover's abode. He's halted by her mother. She tells him that recently she took her own life. Though she left a letter to him. Christopher |
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