our love
printed in the shore—
tide-stolen footmaps
Jonathan Rieck |
looking back
train tracks
how Tumblr am I?
Valina Hoang |
dust motes
spinning in the light
inhale exhale
Mckenzie Peck |
two tires
then four
feathers flutter in the air
Sara Siegfried |
falling slowly
down the radio station
static
Olivia Cuff |
music playing
louder louder LOUDER
lost focus
Mikayla Shaw |
my face against
the brown table
. . . drool
Alexandria Wilson |
midnight conversations
phones buzzing
is there more to life
Rebecca Coutcher |
Chicago-style hot dog—
weapon of choice
a food fight
Valina Hoang |
wishing he could
fly man
with 2 canes
Erin O'Brien |
moonlight
trees whispering
owls hoot
Brandi DeLeonardo |
tentacles and spikes
a monster
with spiraling eyes
Natalie Zelman |
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I really enjoyed both of these haiku. They are both quite different from each other but are still entertaining haiku in my eyes. I like the first haiku because of the second line. Just the thought of trees whispering to each other gives me the chills. I really like the voicing this author used because without reading the third line, it is a question of how the trees are actually whispering. Upon reading the third line however, the reader knows that the owls are hooting, which is causing the trees to seem like they are whispering; it's a fun metaphor that is used well. I also really like the second haiku. I think that the author did a very good job in using words that allowed the reader to have a strong image of what this monster looks like. The beauty of this is that the monster that each person visualizes is never going to be the same. There will always be certain features about this imaginative character that are different from others. Daniel |
stone walls high
chipmunks leap from the edge
to branches safety
Trista Smith |
relax and float
into a new world
don't let limits rise
Taylor Hagerdorn |
today
might be
the
only day
Alec Campbell |
the three toddlers
turn into lions
for one night only
Daniel Rausch |
I like these haiku because of the image of floating. In the first haiku, I imagine the scene in slow motion with the chipmunks running from something they are scared of. They're running along the stone wall, but they run into a dead end and they have to make a leap of faith. They jump and slowly they make it across the gap to the branches. The second haiku makes me think of being carefree and floating in the sky with the clouds. Erin |
I really liked the focus on the idea of living in the moment in this pair. It is very easy in this ever-changing world to get caught up in thoughts of the future, and of what will happen tomorrow or next week or next month or next year. We spend so much time thinking about the future that I think a lot of us forget to live in the present and enjoy life while we can. We miss so many opportunities by doing this. I like the first haiku, because it is a nice reminder to make the most of every moment. If you have the chance to do something, do it, because you may not have the chance later on. I like the second haiku, because I think that kids are a lot better at appreciating every moment than adults are. A kid acts on impulse, which may not be the best in some circumstances, but it is a good way of not taking any moment for granted. Mackenzie
This pair was one of my favorite because of the story it tells. I love how these haiku seem to be written together. After reading these I thought of Halloween. Children look forward to wearing their Halloween costumes for days leading up to that one exciting night. This image is depicted in the first haiku as one could read it as Halloween being the only day children can live their dream of being a superhero or princess. Children then seem to "transform" on Halloween into all sorts of different roles, from doctors to mailmen. The second haiku accurately depicts this. The image of three toddlers dressed in identical lion costumes is something that typically only happen on Halloween. I miss the days of dressing up as Snow White or a Pumpkin and going door to door with my parents trick-or-treating. This pair matches the time of year perfectly and serves as an excellent reminder of these precious memories. Sara
I really love this pair because it focuses on the breathless and animalistic way we are told not to live by. We are told to restrain ourselves, to avoid focusing on the end. Yet, the first haiku takes the inevitable end in stride; it understands and seems content with the fact that this is not an endless loop. This, whatever 'this' may be, has an end—and that is perfectly alright. The second haiku is a babysitter's nightmare, but one that delights those who hear the tale for years. Three children embrace their inner animal, becoming what their nature seems to have always wanted them to be. It's a marvelous transformation, one they will most likely look back with hazy remembrance for the rest of their lives. Taylor |
