Haiku to Edit 1

Global Haiku • Millikin University • July 2016

Four edit actions: cut unneccesary words, add context (setting, time), replace for better images, & rearrance the furniture.


freshly painted toes
apple flavored lip gloss smile
filled with a peanut butter day

 

 

 

 


my kayak gliding on water
crystal clear waters
fish swim on by


Fireworks
Red white and blue
Independence


As we sit on the porch
Peaceful afternoon
A father's advice

 

 

 


lighten lanterns call in
ships in the night
for troubled wife's


carousel
monkeys, lions & zebras
as the music plays

 

 



still of the night
broken by a clamour
just the cats

 

 

 

 


turtles in the mud
river waters high
log cabin


ice creams
warm sunny days
whip cream on her nose


hanging by a thread
good news arrives
a glimmer of hope


Christmas day
opening boxes
his hazel eyes smile at me

 

 

 

 


family
with grandma and grandpa
summer vacation

 


yellow rain ponchos
awestruck wonder
Horseshoe waterfall

 

 

 



flooding river banks
people scurrying around
running from the cabin

 


early morning
cleaning house
before starting the day


© 2016, Randy Brooks • Millikin University
All rights returned to authors upon publication.