Haiku to Edit 1
Global Haiku • Millikin University • July 2016
Four edit actions: cut unneccesary words, add context (setting, time), replace for better images, & rearrance the furniture.
freshly painted toes apple lip gloss apple flavored lip gloss Michelle Hosapple painted toes apple lip gloss lip gloss smile painted toes peanut butter day, |
my kayak gliding on water kayak gliding Zacahery Cronister clear water fish swimming kayak glides kayak gliding on water
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Fireworks Independence Day Independence Day! Independence Day dark night Re s Marshaya Sangster Independence The Red, White, Blue |
As we sit on the porch a quiet afternoon sitting on the porch peaceful afternoon Zacahery Cronister porch swing sways peaceful afternoon father's hand on my shoulder |
lighten lanterns call in ships in the night troubled wife's ships in the night wives on the shore ships in the night Michelle Hosapple
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carousel music plays carousel music music playing riding monkeys and lions riding monkeys and lions Amanda Ferguson
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still of the night trash can crashes still of the night Bill Fields
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turtles in the mud river water high muddy turtles old log cabin high river waters high river waters log cabin Darla Laymon
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ice creams ice cream sundae warm sunny day Amanda Ferguson warm sunny day hot days whip cream on her nose sunny day ice cream sundae dipped cones
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hanging by a thread in a hospital bed About to give up Bethany Wetherholt Giving up |
Christmas day Christmas day Jennifer Tohill his hazel eyes smile |
family summer vacation Sonja Chargois summer vacation summer vacation |
yellow rain ponchos Horseshoe Falls yellow rain slickers so small Cristine Lourash
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flooding river banks running form the cabin flooded river Darla Laymon |
early morning yawn Marshaya Sangster sunrise on the horizon before the day starts
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