Haiku to Edit 1
Global Haiku • Millikin University • July 2018
cut • add • replace • rearrange
cut non-essentials • add context or scene • replace with stronger images • rearrange the order of perception
scrolling on old friends' facebooks
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on these lonely nights
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Sad songs only
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shoes scattered around
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laying on the beach
September dove hunt
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sunset over the trees
Summer fun
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life
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perfume and air fresheners
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smoke and onion
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warm bed—good sleep
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combine these 2 attempts into 1 new haiku: black and dry burnt onions
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combine these 2 attempts into 1 new haiku: bug-eyed child old sewing machine
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