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Global Haiku • Millikin University • June 2015

Author's favorite edited version indicated in bold type.

 

In the park
A small girl swings
High above the tall green trees

A small girl swings
High above the trees—
at dusk

Alone in the park
A small girl swings
Into the tall green trees

alone in the park
a small girl swings
high above the trees

Aesha Bunch

 

 

bright blue sky
birds chirping
the little girl day dreams

little girl daydreams
birds chirping
at the bright blue sky

Birds chirp as girl dreams
Vast blue skies

birds chirping
under a bright blue sky
her daydream

Birds chirp
In the bright blue sky
Soothes the girl as she day dreems

under the bight blue sky
birds are chirping
little girl day dreams

Hannah Woolard

 

candles lit
turkey on the table
family gathered around

turkey on the table
family gathered around
candle light

turkey on the table
lit candles
family gathers

Family gathers around
Under the candle light
Excited for the turkey on the table

candles lit
for Thanksgiving dinner
a circle of hands

Aesha Bunch

turkey on the table
the family quiets down
for grace

 

fire crackles
company gathers to for fellowships
the moon glow in the sky

fire crackles
company gathers for the fellowship
under the moon lit sky

Hannah Woolard

the moon glows—fire crackles
they gather

campfire smoke
rises to the full moon
a circle of friends

The crackling of fire
Gathers company together
Under the moonlit sky

 

 

 

 

bright moon
the wind whistles
the dog howls

bright moon—
dogs howl in the whistling wind

Lisa Capasso

The wind whistles
The dog howls
Under the bright lit moon

the wind whistles
a dog howls
at the bright moon

The whistle of the wind
Carries the dogs howl
Under the bright moon

bright moon
over windy pines
the dog howls

bright moon
the dog howls
into the wind

 

pretty in pink
sparkles galore
it’s time for the little girl to take a bath

sparkles shine
pretty in pink
time to take a bath

Dressed up in pink
Covered in sparkles
The little girls goes to wash up

sparkling pink
bath time
for the little girl

pink sparkles
in her hair
bath water running

Hannah Woolard

 

the door bell rings
dogs began to bark
I open the big yellow door

the doorbell rings
dogs bark
I peek through the door

Aesha Bunch

dogs bark
before the doorbell rings
I open the big yellow door

Dogs begin to bark
At the sound of the doorbell
I open the big yellow door

a knock on the door
dogs began to bark
open the yellow door

 

a bell rings
wiping away chalk from her finger tips
time for dinner

Wipings away chalk from her finer tips
Time for dinner

At dusk she hears the bell
Cleaning her hands
Time for dinner

wiping away chalk
she hears the dinner bell
remembering she’s hungry

Lisa Capasso

dinner bell
wiping chalk from her fingertips
to go in

wiping chalk
from her fingertips
time for dinner

church bell
the hopscotch girl wipes chalk
from her fingertips

a bell rings
wiping away chalk from her finger tips
time for lunch


© 2015, Randy Brooks • Millikin University
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