Haiku Writing Roundtable--Haiku Edits 1, PACE November 2004

It was the first snow fall of the season. The last day of work before the Thanksgiving holiday, I sat outside of my daughter’s school patiently waiting for her to emerge. She had an eye doctor appointment we needed to get too but it seemed as though she may never come out. Other parents were waiting for their children too. Some children walked home wearing lightweight jackets or no coats at all. The wind and snow seem to beat down on the children as they walked, some turned around and walked backward to avoid the pain of the stinging wind and snow on their face.

walking backwards
pain of
wind and snow

first snow
children walking home
backs to the stinging win
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Karen Currie

first snow
patiently waiting
daughter's appearance

edit suggestion by Anna Johnson

 

old farmhouse
childhood play
squeaky stairs

Karen Fleener

gagpipes
and parades
give me vertigo

Brenda Ware

My cousins and I would go down to the creek by their house during the summer. There were dragonflies everywhere and we would watch them flitter above the water. We would try so hard to catch a frog, but never was able to actually grab on to one. Back then nature was our playmate. We never wanted to stay inside. We were always running around by the creek and we were alive and free in the fresh air.

Steamy pond
The bullfrog
Sings its love song

dragonflies everywhere
cousins leap
the frog splashes away

Julie Rambo

snowy day
clean hair
snuggle close

train whistle in distance
father dies
suffering ends

Dianne Olson

 

When a young girl, I enjoyed reading book after book. The Evans Branch Library was quiet, serene and calm, and about ten blocks from our home. I recall the deep red shiny linoleum tile floors and the soft eyed librarians. They knew me by name because I was there every spare moment I had. My library card was tattered and used so much, the little metal square was intact though and it was all I needed to check out books to take home. On Saturdays, there were various youth programs; especially films shown of faraway places. The most interesting film I watched was about a little girl my age from French Canada. The snowy landscape of Canada reminded me of the winters in Illinois. The little girl and her family lived on a farm and she showed all the chores she had to do before going to school in the morning. After the film, I would go into the youth section and choose some books to take home with me; there were always too many to check out so I would sit down and read as many as possible. The soft pages of the books flipped as I read quickly. I wanted to read as many of the books I had selected and take the rest home. Often, I would stay too long and the kind librarian would remind me to go home. I liked the check out line of the library; the librarian would open the soft book covers and remove the card in the back and stick it into the date machine and replace it in the back cover. The stamp machine had a distinct sound which even today I have not encountered any sound similar. Haiku attempt:

imprint the ideas because her mind x-rays them

Brenda Ware

hot summer day
kids
sandlot

ready to play
all alone
eager to go

Napoleon Mond

Christmas photos
cookies and milk
precious smiles

Sunny day
fishing pole
skillet sizzles

Rusty Vinson

the park, the crowd
summer fun
lights

spring storm
evening alone
pitch black

Victoria Williams

family member
out of the shower
front of the church

daughters
holiday help
where did the time go?

Tina Mond

endless energy
toddler boy
lots of imagination

cape cod home
sharing with Mom
on the lawn

Gidget Kellenberger

august sunshine
rows of hay
pitchforks and a wagon

rough-cut lumber shed
old hanging tools
cobwebs

David Barr

warm spring morn
season’s first butterflies
chased by a little girl

Karen Bender

railroad tracks near
storm coming
children running

Jennifer West

sleeping family
still house
moving mind

4 people
4 layers of clothes
4 layers of snow

Jennifer West

as we talk
I watch
lightning bugs

David Workman

 

long walks
family farm
husband

sunbeam
sleeping dog
total contentment

Barbara Connelley

howling furious wind and rain
awkward swollen belly
you strong and steady

summer evening
charcoal grill aflame
freckled faces in the moonlight

Jeanne Luckenbill

a lost relationship
found again
on the terrace

a tall steeple
we wait inside
the choir sings

David Workman


© 2004, Randy Brooks • Millikin University
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