Haiku to Edit 1
Global Haiku • Millikin University • November 2012
Cut unnecessary words.
Add more context or sensory content.
Rearrange the furniture.
Replace (cut and add) to enrich & strengthen.
Haiku are rarely complete sentences. Often verbless. Avoid shopping list haiku. We want phrasing & music. Give us pause.
trumpets trumpets
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salty tears |
water running |
Red Truck
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dressing room |
slippers on . . .
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little boys on the bench
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laughter all around |
fresh fallen snow
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papers cover
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summer night |
skinny dipping
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poker parties at the big round table
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drifting snow |
fresh fallen snow |
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