so close:

fresh cut grass
bright colors
on the kites flying high

de-list:

midnight walk
moonlight vision
brisk air

who:

walk forever
to reach the waves
sand struggles

dangler:

the hospital bed
watching the door
as the shadows pass by

check plurals & caps:

Chilly evenings
Dirt track racing
Checkered flag

hint of context:

seeing you tonight
loving you
always from afar

rearrange:

summer afternoon
cool fridge
lingering smell of vinegar

perspective:

the stink coming from the back
doesn't bother us—
hockey win

plurals & de-list:

loud howls
open windows
bright moonlight

rearrange phrasing:

smell of bubble bath
sigh
shaving legs

hint of significance:

patches of snow
line the inside
of the windowsill

rearrange or de-list:

the last breakfast
cinnamon rolls
open heart surgery

phrasing:

April visit to Grandma's farm
back porch haven
hundreds of feathery peepers

three phrases:

he takes her hand
a silk white gown
the new dance starts

hint of where:

ex-lovers
as if no time
has passed