so close:

fresh cut grass
bright colors
on the kites flying high

cut grass
bright colors
kites flying high

kites soaring
bright colors
fresh cut grass

fresh grass
bright colors
the kites flying high

fresh cut grass
bright colors
while the kites are flying high

while the kites are flying high
with bright colors above
smelling the fresh cut grass

bright colors
on the kites flying high
against the sky

bright colors
on the kites flying high
beautiful blue sky

kites flying high
bright colors
on the beautiful blue sky

freshly cut grass
kits flying high
bright colors

bright colors
kites flying high
on fresh cut grass

fresh cut grass
sky bright colors
kites flying high

fresh cut grass
bright colors—sky
kites flying high

bright colors of the kites
flying high
against the sky

fresh cut grass 
meet bright colors
on kites flying high

the freshest cut grass
the brightest colors
on kites flying high

de-list:

midnight walk
moonlight vision
brisk air

brisk air
with moonlit vision
we take our midnight walk

light chill
the moonlight gives us
vision for the walk

moonlight vision
brisk air
of a midnight walk

who:

walk forever
to reach the waves
sand struggles

she walks forever
to reach the waves
sand struggles

they walk forever
to see the waves
they begin to struggle

we walk forever
to reach the waves
sand struggles

she walks forever
to reach the waves
sand struggles

Grandpa walks forever
to reach the waves
sand struggles

the couple walks forever
to reach the waves
sand struggles

the babies walk forever
to reach the waves
sand struggles

I walk forever
to reach the waves
the sand struggles

he walks forever
to reach the waves
as the sand struggles

the ex-lovers converse
as if no time
has passed

the ex-lovers warmly embrace
as if no time
has passed

dangler:

the hospital bed
watching the door
as the shadows pass by

hospital room
only the shadows
pass by my door

lonely bed
I have no visitors
except for the shadows

watching the door
hospital bed
as shadows pass

laying in the hospital bed
watching the door
as shadows pass

watching the door
as shadows pass
hospital bed

hospital bed
watching the door
as shadows pass

watching the door
from the hospital bed
shadows pass by

check plurals & caps:

Chilly evenings
Dirt track racing
Checkered flag

chilly night
dirt track racing
checkered flag

dirt tracks
checkered flags
evening under the lights

chilly evenings
checkered flag and racing

dirt track racing
chilly evening
checkered flag

chilly evening
at the dirt track
checkered flag

checkered flag
at the dirt track
Autumn chill

chilly evening—checkered flags
dirt track racing

checkered flag—chilling evening
dirt track racing

hint of context:

seeing you tonight
loving you
always from afar

seeing you tonight
loving you
always from afar

seeing you from afar
always loving you

loving you
from afar
courage

rearrange:

summer afternoon
cool fridge
lingering smell of vinegar

lingering smell of vinegar
cool fridge
Summer afternoon

smell of vinegar
cool fridge
smell of vinegar

cool fridge on summer afternoon
lingering smell of vinegar

summer afternoon
the smell of vinegar
lingering

lingering smell of vinegar
from a cool fridge
summer afternoon

the smell of vinegar
lingers in the fridge
summer afternoon

summer afternoon
the smell of vinegar
lingering

the smell of vinegar
lingers
in the cool fridge

lingering smell of vinegar
from the cool fridge
on a summer afternoon

perspective:

the stink coming from the back
doesn't bother us—
hockey win

plurals & de-list:

loud howls
open windows
bright moonlight

loud howls
open windows
bright moonlight

a loud howl
through an open window
a summer moonlight call

through an open window
the moonlight howl
peaceful and vivid

open window
loud howl
bright moonlight

bright moonlight
through an open
window
loud howls

open window
howls from the moonlight

open window
loud howl
bright moonlight

bright moonlight
through an open window
loud howls

open window
loud howl
from the bright moonlight

rearrange phrasing:

smell of bubble bath
sigh
shaving legs

fragrant bubble bath
shaving legs
sigh

bubble bath
shaving
sigh

smell of bubble bath
shaving legs
sigh

shaving legs
smell of bubble bath
sigh

sigh smell of bubble bath
shaving legs
sigh

favorite things
smooth legs and
the scent of a bubble bath

in the bubble bath
I shave my legs
Ahhhh . . .

ahh . . .
shaving my legs
the smell of bubble bath

shaving my legs
ahh . . .
the small of bubble bath

hint of significance:

patches of snow
line the inside
of the windowsill

patches of snow
line the inside
of the windowsill

patches of snow
lining the windowsill
marking the lingering of winter

the lingering of winter
marked by patches of snow
on a frosted windowsill

windowsill
patches of snow
line the inside

windowsill
lined with
patches of snow

snowfall
lines the edge
of the windowsill

rearrange or de-list:

the last breakfast
cinnamon rolls
open heart surgery

the last breakfast
cinnamon rolls
open heart surgery

cinnamon rolls baking
the last breakfast before—
my open heart surgery

last breakfast before
open heart surgery
but first—cinnamon rolls

open heart surgery
cinnamon rolls
the last breakfast

open heart surgery
we share our last breakfast
cinnamon rolls

Open heart surgery
I smell the last breakfast
Cinnamon rolls

open heart surgery
cinnamon rolls
the last breakfast

open heart surgery
we share our last breakfast cinnamon rolls

the last breakfast
cinnamon rolls
open heart surgery

the last breakfast
before open heart surgery
cinnamon rolls

open heart surgery
one last breakfast
cinnamon rolls

cinnamon rolls
open heart surgery
last breakfast

cinnamon rolls
the last breakfast
before open heart surgery

phrasing:

April visit to Grandma's farm
back porch haven
hundreds of feathery peepers

Spring visit
Grandma's farm full of
Feathery peepers

Grandma's farm
Back porch haven filled
With feathery peepers

three phrases:

he takes her hand
a silk white gown
the new dance starts

he takes her hand
a silk white gown
the new dance starts

silk white gown
he takes her hand
and begins the new dance

white dress
their hands begin
the ensuing dance

a silk white down
he takes her hand
to dance

he sees the silk white gown
he takes her hand
to dance

silk white gown
takes her hand
the dance starts

a silk white gown
he takes her hand
as the dance starts

white silk gown
he takes her hand
their new dance starts

vows spoken hearts joined
he takes her hand
they dance

White gown
Hand in hand
The dance begins

Hand in hand
It all starts now
A white gown

hint of where:

ex-lovers
as if no time
has passed

ex lovers
together as if
no time has passed

no time has passed
ex lovers
together as if

ex-lovers in bed—
as if no time
had passed

ex-lovers whispering
as if no time
has passed