Haiku Seeking Edits & Response 6—Tan-Renga

Global Haiku Tradition--Tan-renga Attempts, Spring 2003

Capping verses for tan-renga. Read and imagine the moment fully, then add one more image or phrase that takes extends the moment as you imagine it.
 

glowing logs
tumbling at my feet
I jump back
ghost story
interrupted

Matt Whitsett & Miranda Baker
1st

laughing
as we try
her makeup on
lipstick smeared
on my teeth

Chrissy Hulse & Stacey Orr
1st

morning fog
dog's bark echoes
across the water
a single ember
still aglow

Alyson Ludek & group
1st

     

at work
gossiping with friends
my day off
i resist
bussing the table

Miranda Baker & Mary Reed
1st

fishing trip--
dog paddles after
the boat
with a red ball
in his mouth

Alyson Ludek & Miranda Baker
1st

august night
a train whistle
almost home
i adjust
for my bladder

Bill Flowers & Mary Reed
1st

reading groups selected 2 of the best caps
then we decided which was the favorite & why


glowing logs
tumbling to my feet
I jump back
[                     ]
[                     ]

glowing logs
tumbling to my feet
I jump back
the owl stares
from a tree

glowing logs
tumbling to my feet
I jump back
narrowly saving
my marshmellow

glowing logs
tumbling at my feet
I jump back
ghost story
interrupted

Matt Whitsett & Miranda Baker
1st

glowing logs
tumbling to my feet
I jump back
laughter from
my friends

glowing logs
tumbling to my feet
I jump back
as they roll
to my blanket

glowing logs
tumbling to my feet
I jump back
stomping
to extinguish the fire

Matt Whitsett & Xiu Zheng
2nd

glowing logs
tumbling to my feet
i jump back
a sizzle
after the splash


laughing
as we try
her makeup on
[                     ]
[                     ]

laughing
as we try
her makeup on
lipstick smeared
on my teeth

Chrissy Hulse & Stacey Orr
1st

laughing
as we try
her makeup on
color
up to my eyebrows

Chrissy Hulse & Jennifer Griebel
2nd

laughing
as we try
her makeup on
red lipstick
on her cheek

laughing
as we try
her makeup on
mom yells
from the other room

laughing
as we try
her makeup on
cheeks lost
in a sea of blush

laughing
as we try
her makeup on
oops…
got caught!

laughing
as we try
her makeup on
hope she doesn't yell
… this time


morning fog
dog's bark echoes
across the water
[                     ]
[                     ]

morning fog
dog's bark echoes
across the water
in the canoe
we paddle silently

Alyson Ludek & Stacey Orr
2nd

morning fog
dog's bark echoes
across the water
I tie on my lure
at the dock

morning fog
dog's bark echoes
across the water
my fishing boat
heads down stream

morning fog
dog's bark echoes
across the water
squatting
behind a tree

morning fog
dog's bark echoes
across the water
a single ember
still aglow

Alyson Ludek & group
1st

morning fog
dog's bark echoes
across the water
the fisherman calls
"Here boy"

morning fog
dog's bark echoes
across the water
the only fish submerges
…ripples

morning fog
dog's bark echoes
across the water
the boat and the bobber
sit motionless on the water


at work
gossiping with friends
my day off
[                     ]
[                     ]

at work
gossiping with friends
my day off
I still come
…as a customer

at work
gossiping with friends
my day off
he said
WHAT?

at work
gossiping with friends
my day off
I pretend
not to see him

Miranda Baker & Jennifer Griebel
2nd

at work
gossiping with friends
my day off
15 minutes before
his shift ends

at work
gossiping with friends
my day off
the boss throws looks
in my direction

at work
gossiping with friends
my day off
i resist
bussing the table

Miranda Baker & Mary Reed
1st


fishing trip—
dog paddles after
the boat
[                     ]
[                     ]

fishing trip—
dog paddles after
the boat
happily
wagging its tail

fishing trip--
dog paddles after
the boat
my cooler sinks
to the bottom

fishing trip--
dog paddles after
the boat
in six year old bliss
I wave to mom

fishing trip--
dog paddles after
the boat
with a red ball
in his mouth

Alyson Ludek & Miranda Baker
1st

fishing trip--
dog paddles after
the boat
autumn leaf
floats on the water

Alyson Ludek & group
2nd

fishing trip--
dog paddles after
the boat
fish in mouth
he looks for master's approval

fishing trip--
dog paddles after
the boat
defeated
and without the fish


August night
a train whistle
almost home
[                     ]
[                     ]

August night
a train whistle
almost home
the man waits
impatiently

August night
a train whistle
almost home
I squint
through the steamy rain

August night
a train whistle
almost home
two long weeks
without him 

August night
a train whistle
almost home
my car dies
in the station lot

Bill Flowers & Courtney Ruffner
2nd

August night
a train whistle
almost home
from a long summer
in the mountains

August night
a train whistle
almost home
yawning…
sinking deeper in my seat

August night
a train whistle
almost home
a robin
flies south

august night
a train whistle
almost home
i adjust
for my bladder

Bill Flowers & Mary Reed
1st

August night
a train whistle
almost home
smell of soy
in the air


© 2003, Randy Brooks • Millikin University
All rights returned to authors upon publication.