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Top 10 Picks from Meghan Morgan (my friend J) #1 Response: I loved this movie! I felt the exact same chills, not only when I watched the movie, but also when I went running down my road. I live out in the country where I am surrounded by corn fields. I carry my cell phone with me now when I am out running to make me feel safer. #2 on that tragic
day Response:
To this day, my heart still aches for what happened on September 11th.
I never imagined seeing something like that in my life. I never
imagined seeing war either. I wish the best of luck to all our armed
forces*we are cheering for you! #3 Response: I hold a deep passion for love and romance. Being best friends first, then turning the friendship into a relationship is a great thing. I just watched a movie tonight where this happened. Hopefully it works out for the best and does not ruin the friendship*it is worth a try, however. #4 drown in
your arms Response:
I love cuddling with my boyfriend. It always puts a smile on my
face when he hugs me or has his arms around me. That is one of the
things I look forward to when I get married. strands of
tear Response: I daydream all the time about the day I get proposed to. I always wonder how it will be. I truly cannot wait! I hope it comes soon. #6 forget me
not Response:
Getting ready to graduate, I know my friends and I will have to separate.
This is the one thing I hated about graduating from high school and dread
with graduating from college. I always try to keep in touch, even
though it may not be as often as I like. My family and friends are
the most important thing to me. #7 those special
moments we spent Response:
I hold so many memories near to my heart. Memories are all I have
for some of my friendships. Each memory dear to me is special and
has impacted my life in some way. #8 cold moon Response: I have memories of doing this with my boyfriend when we first started dating, which was in December. We would stand out in the cold and take a half hour to say goodbye. I love being outdoors, so I did not mind. #9 a broken
heart Response:
I do understand because I have had a broken heart. I am glad that
I can be there to give encouragement to others and just lend a shoulder
to cry on. Sometimes that is just what someone needs. #10 yellow school
buses Response: This automatically made me think of Millikin's parking situation. I get frustrated not being able to find a spot. They need to add more parking for their students. After all, we are their source of income. ------------------------------------ Top 10 Picks
from Nikki Garry (my haiku expert friend J) #1 yellow school
buses Response: This situation is all too familiar - the school buses arrive early to get the "good" parking spaces leaving others to continuously circle around until the students emerge from the crowd! At last you can leave! #2 messy lumps Response: Often times, when we are going through difficult/trying times in life, the last thing we are concerned about are how we look. The image of a lumpy ponytail shows that the last thing on the girl's mind is her appearance. #3 first spring
day Response:
I just like the 'picture' of this haiku. It makes me think of memories
of the winter even though the spring is here * #4 Goodbye China
Sea Response: Sometimes to be successful, it demands for us to leave our comfort zone and all that is dear to us; and this is what this haiku depicts* Like the saying goes "don't forget where you've come from*" #5 Response: I see someone standing near the edge of a cliff overlooking a sea. And as he/she stands there the only thing he/she can hear is the sound of the water against the rocks. Perhaps the 'cry' of the water is symbolic of the cry of the sea-watcher. #6 passing each
other Response: Sometimes after you've been hurt by someone the best thing you can do is avoid contact with them, which is the feeling I get from this haiku. #7 one that
tragic day Response:
The word "sank" goes well with the idea of 9-11. #8 scratched
fingers Response:
The things we do for love*! The thorns could also represent the
thorns in his/her heart*(I also think of sacrificing our feeling/well-being
for that of others.) #9 frisbees
in the air Response:
This haiku reminds me of a classroom in Shilling. And as the professor
lectures to you, you can hear the sound of music and can picture students
in the Shilling lawn playing frisbee. So, the rest of the class
is spent watching your watch so that you can join the fun outside! sparkling
water Response: I see a group of ducks peacefully floating in the pond but as bread is thrown to them they begin to fight over the scraps. And once gone they're back to being peaceful* Xiu Ying Zheng |
Aaron's favorite picks out of all my haiku: syrupy kisses He said that he had to admit that the first reason he loved this haiku so much was that it was about him, but then he gave me other reasons as well. He said that the words chosen in this particular haiku were powerful in creating the image. One way that they do this is by drawing upon more than one of the senses. For instance, the word "syrupy" implies a sticky feel, a specific smell that most people are familiar with, and a sweet taste all at once. Another word that Aaron found powerful was the word "griddle." With this word, he couldn't really explain why...he just appreciated the sound of it. cold tile Aaron particularly liked this one because of its juxtaposition of formal and informal, of special occassion and the everyday. First, he noticed the contrast between formal and informal. The waltz, a ballroom dance, is generally something performed or done at a formal dance or dinner party. The idea of a "barefoot waltz" however introduces an element of informality that is not normally associated with such an occassion. Additionally, Aaron noticed that having this "barefoot waltz" take place on the kitchen floor rather than the dance floor gave the moment a sort of romantic tenderness and spontaneity...rendering the "everyday" not such an everyday event after all. White horizon This poem was Aaron's third favorite one because he said that he just liked the peaceful sense of communion with nature and the infinite. Instead of trying to avoid the falling snow, the person in this poem welcomes each snowflake as a part of herself. Additionally, he liked the vastness of the white horizon which gave him a sense of emptiness because of the barren winter landscape; however, the same white horizon gave him a sense of fullness...a landscape filled with so many snowflakes that everything looks like one giant white "thing." (That was a direct quote...hehehe...) Brindin Hill |
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I showed about 20 of my haiku to some family members and friends and these were the five that most of them liked. Most of them had the same response to them so rather than giving each person's response separately, I am just summarizing what they said. leaf dangling
loosely Most liked the idea of this haiku. They could see that the leaf symbolizes hopes and dreams. Hopes can be high to begin with but the slightest thing can come along and mess everything up. This is similar to a loose leaf. The slightest movement or breeze can knock it from the tree and ruin its chance to grow and shine. another school
day Several commented on this haiku but the person who really related to it most was my cousin who is student teaching. It instantly reminded her of going to school one day to find that a boy she had been working with had transferred schools. It reminded her of the disappointment she felt for the week following his departure. She'd look at his desk and continue to see his potential but felt helpless because she can't help him anymore. tiny creek
Every person I showed my haiku to liked this one. They felt like kids again when reading it. Generally kids would be the only ones to take off into a creek and not care about getting muddy or dirty. They all liked the playfulness of it and enjoyed being taken back to moments that I think they could relate to in their childhood. treehouse
Several liked this one as well because they could really picture the situation in their minds. They instantly put themselves into the position and felt themselves falling. Many commented that it really drew them into the moment and they could vividly play the scene in their minds. mazes of
bales This haiku appealed to my cousins mostly because they could relate to being in grandpa's loft. A few people at work also liked it because they could sense the playfulness of it. They pictured a kid standing in the loft with tons of hay and then jumping into the cushion below them. It made them feel like small children again. Courtney Ruffner |
christmas
lights glow brightly My dad enjoyed
this one because he looks forward to spending his winter evenings around
the fire with the reflection of the lights outside on our window. He said
that this created a good visual for him. large blue
chair He really liked this one because, well its about he and I. He brought out the picture of the two of us on this chair and told me stories of how we would fall asleep together all of the time, that was his idea of babysitting! early spring
chills My sister
liked this one because it reminded her of my graduation and how neat it
was for her to see that. I think she liked this one because she's in high
school now and is looking forward to that very day! the afternoon
breeze She also enjoyed this one because it reminded her of our trip to Florida this summer when I got sun poisoning our second day there, which was funny because this was the event I was remembering while writing it. She said she could still see my sun burnt legs and thought it was funny that I couldn't put my own lotion on my face or legs because I was too burnt! She loves it when I am useless! wiping the
tears My dad liked this one because he could sense the emotion and knew where the memories came from. He said that of all that I showed him, this one really was "me" expressing myself, which is what he feels haiku should do. Chrissy Hulse |
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2 am drive "I liked this one because it reminded me of the drives to Florida for Spring Break! Those were fun!" —Jennifer Stone "I like the 2am one because it reminds me of driving to Florida for Spring Break." —Lacy Goldsboro driving to
Florida "I liked this one because it reminded me of our first family vacation to Florida. We drove all the way and my brother and I were constantly fighting over the back seat." —Jennifer Stone dimmed lights "I like the one about the dimmed lights, back ground music because it is sweet and it reminded me of the time Aaron did that for you this summer." —Lacy Goldsboro the unknown
word "This one reminds me of grade school spelling bees. I was a terrible speller. I think everyone won one, but me." —Abigail Wessler early June
morning This one hit home to me the most of any of them. I can remember going to swimming lessons when I was about 4 or 5 years old and the water was always freezing and I hated swimming lessons more than anything in the world! It was my least favorite part of summer. —Ryan Miller "I really like this one. I loved swimming when I was little, but I hated going to lessons. It took the fun out of swimming." — Abigail Wessler Stacey Orr |
Meghan Morgan's Picks — Friend of Miranda's #1 ritzy neighborhood Response:
This was my favorite show in high school until it went off the air.
We would always watch it and talk about the show the next day. Sometimes,
we would even have a girls' night to watch it. I am sad it went
off the air, but I have new shows now. #2 called to
the office Response:
I had this happen to me, except it was roses for my anniversary.
It was always a dream of mine to have flowers waiting for me. I
usually did get flowers for Valentine's Day too, but it was a floral arrangement.
I love flowers even though they do not last very long . . . it is all
about the thought. #3 countdown
begins Response: New Year's Eve is my birthday, so I love that day. I hate when the ball drops; however, because my day is over. My birthday is always a party though. #4 like my "to
do" list Response:
I have a "to do" list everyday. Even with all the stuff
I have going on, my boyfriend is always on my mind. I do not get
to see him much, so thoughts of him are what I thrive on. #5 distant hearts Response: After three years of being together, my boyfriend went off to college nine hours away. He was gone on-and-off for two years. Gazing up at the sky was all we had sometimes. #6 walking down
the street Response: This is an awesome feeling, even though I do not drink much. I have been to both Las Vegas and New Orleans where this happens. The only time you can drink on the streets here is during the Decatur Celebration, and that is limited. #7 standing
in line Response: When I went to New Orleans for my 21st birthday and the Illinois football game, I had a hurricane. This is New Orleans' signature. I enjoyed the drink, but I would have liked it better frozen. It was strong! #8 childishly
looking Response: I do this on every flight*I have only been on 6 though. I love looking at what is underneath me. It helps to make the flight go by faster, unless all you can see are clouds. #9 elbow to
elbow Response: During the winter months in high school, I always went to movies. That is usually what I did on dates too because there is not much here in Decatur. I like going to movies, even though they are expensive. Theatre popcorn is the best. #10 midwinter
night Response: I have gone through this. Fortunately, now we are back together. It is so hard to forget the person you have loved for so long. All you can do is hang onto faith. Miranda Baker |
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Every single
one of the people I showed my haiku to liked the following haiku: river fog All of my family said this reminded them of our vacations on the river in Branson. My brother said it specifically reminded him of the creaky old bridge to the boat dock. For my dad it brought back memories of trout fishing and the vacation we went on with grandma and with my brother being just a few months old. My mom mentioned that the haiku made her think of the dew covered spider webs and the patches of fog that we'd go through in the boat on the river. • My mother,
aunt and grandma all liked this next haiku: midday nap They all agreed that the haiku reminded them of camping at Dam West campground at Carlyle Lake. They all like the rhythmic sound of the bells as opposed to me who finds them annoying. My aunt came up with a specific memory when it stormed at the lake, but there was an amazing double rainbow that we took pictures of. The bells were of course loud during the storm. My grandma loves the bells, and they put her right to sleep, so she's been known to take naps in the lawn chair rather than in the tent! • My mom and
aunt both liked the next one: my heart
pounds They both thought of the same memory after reading this haiku. Before my aunt and uncle were married, one Christmas my uncle gave my aunt a ring, but it wasn't an engagement ring. When he pulled out the tiny box everyone thought he was going to propose including my aunt. She loves the ring of course, but at the same time was just a little disappointed. My mom said everyone was so sure he was proposing that we were practically patting him on the back and congratulating him. Funny! • My dad and brother both liked this next one: thick smell
of fog This one again reminded them of vacations in Branson, but in particular it reminded them of going trout fishing in the spring when just the boys go. • storm clouds
grow My brother went to Canada last summer and he said the clouds there were so amazing that they really did look like mountains. Even though my haiku is the opposite thought, it made him think of that moment in his memory. • My dad had the best comments for the haiku he picked and he also had the most trouble picking favorites. I'd love to put down all his thoughts, but it's too much, so here's some of the best. Bermuda Triangle My dad was in the Navy, and his very first cruise on the air craft carrier was through the Bermuda Triangle. The sailors take turns having "watch" duties and my dad had an overnight watch when they were right in the middle of the Triangle. He said it was storming that night too, so going out on the deck, in the dark, in a bad storm, and in the Bermuda Triangle was very, very scary. Reading the haiku makes him laugh, but also brings back very clear memories. (I did actually write this haiku about that memory. His told me the story before, so I kind of wrote it for him.) • in my parents
room My dad laughed for a long time when he read this one. I wrote this haiku about the exact moment when my parents told me I was going to have a new sibling. They told me they had a surprise for me, so my six year old mind is thinking a new bike or something like that, but instead they tell me mommy's pregnant. I was disappointed, and we all look back on that memory and laugh now, so he really liked the haiku. Jennifer Griebel |
I showed
about 20 of my haiku to some family members and friends and these were
the five that most of them liked. Most of them had the same response to
them so rather than giving each person's response separately, I am just
summarizing what they said. leaf dangling
loosely Most liked the idea of this haiku. They could see that the leaf symbolizes hopes and dreams. Hopes can be high to begin with but the slightest thing can come along and mess everything up. This is similar to a loose leaf. The slightest movement or breeze can knock it from the tree and ruin its chance to grow and shine. another school
day Several commented on this haiku but the person who really related to it most was my cousin who is student teaching. It instantly reminded her of going to school one day to find that a boy she had been working with had transferred schools. It reminded her of the disappointment she felt for the week following his departure. She'd look at his desk and continue to see his potential but felt helpless because she can't help him anymore. tiny creek
Every person I showed my haiku to liked this one. They felt like kids again when reading it. Generally kids would be the only ones to take off into a creek and not care about getting muddy or dirty. They all liked the playfulness of it and enjoyed being taken back to moments that I think they could relate to in their childhood. treehouse
Several liked this one as well because they could really picture the situation in their minds. They instantly put themselves into the position and felt themselves falling. Many commented that it really drew them into the moment and they could vividly play the scene in their minds. mazes of
bales This haiku appealed to my cousins mostly because they could relate to being in grandpa's loft. A few people at work also liked it because they could sense the playfulness of it. They pictured a kid standing in the loft with tons of hay and then jumping into the cushion below them. It made them feel like small children again. Courtney Ruffner |
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I just took 7 of my new ones and 1 old one. I got reactions from 3 friends, and my parents. two small
children this was Aubrey’s( my roommate) 2nd fav and Kevin’s favorite. Kevin says this is “awesome and dynamic” He likes the word ‘discover’. My mom remembers the feeling of discovering race when she was a child long autumn
walk no one really said much about this one, but strangely it evokes the most emotion out of me. There is nothing more healing and spiritual for me than to take a walk in nature. the house
vines this confuses my mom; dad likes it but thinks it is random mom lets
this is Aubrey’s favorite. Paints a clear picture and is an interest perspective from the child. All my mom says is that she wouldn’t let a tattooed lady pierce my ears white tan
gray black My friend Matt says he likes this one but that the snow in Decatur is always just black. Dad says he likes it and it is observant a cold, shivering
purr Aubrey like’s the words cold and shivering. Mom wants to take this cat inside sound of
night critters everyone
thinks this is the funniest and it is Matt’s favorite sun bathing This one
makes Matt happy, and Kevin likes it Kelly Carruth |
After giving
friends a sample of my haiku, I did not find many that were unanimously
favorites all around. Here are a few of the ones that were popular: warmth of
his hand This one was popular because it was "sweet." My boyfriend liked it because it was about him, of course. under blankets
and chairs barefoot long drive
home alone at
night This one
was popular because it painted a visual picture: the image of someone
curled up with the phone, either scared or anticipating a call. The boyfriend,
again, liked it because it was about him. Here are some others that weren't overwhelming favorites but that got some response: scratchy
jazz from the radio This one was said to really capture a moment, specifically of an old couple dancing. It brought up the visual image of that old couple, the man offering his hand to his wife to dance. slow dance This one was a favorite because one of my readers had been that boy with the sweaty shirt, and so he could really relate to it and put himself into the situation. Friday night This one was said to be very common to the college-type, meaning it is what is associated with being in college and on spring break. Although the reader doesn't really enjoy hard alcohol, he could relate to it regardless being of college age. Aylson Ludek |
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A few of
my friends didn't quite understand a couple of my haiku. However, I think
it is because they don't associate the contrast of words that make the
haiku… on his desk On person
didn't know who the blonde was. Another person said he could see the image
but didn't understand the point of it. Also, someone said it seemed surreal. dusty with
cobwebs One girl
wrote, " Such a clear, simple, and darling image." No one else
commented. flashlights The same
girl wrote, "Love hushed giggles. Perfect fit for them!" my mother
lies alone One wrote
that she liked the alternative description of him dying, not mother. The overall
favorite that everyone who read it wrote about it was: his hand
slides lower One person said he had never read an "erotic" haiku and he really liked it. Another girl said it make her wish to be in that moment, that it was really identifiable. Candace Golden |
Responses
to Paul Scherschel's haiku Dave Sowers picks: local bar in the country rolling waves lonesome
sun delivery
truck warm hand honest eyes soft rain afternoon
sinking canoe morning dew unopened
newspaper empty house summer drive ocean rain endless night through the
mountains From Meg Schleppenbach: delivery
truck I like this one because I see a really urban image, perhaps in Chicago, of a truck pulled over on the side of the road outside a store. As always, it is double-parked and very annoying. But, as you sit there waiting for it to move, you see something beautiful in the exhaust pouring out of it. Although, as a liberal, I am definitely against the environmental pollution caused by this haiku and wish it was a hybrid truck instead. :) I also like how you present it with the cascading lines. It looks like the exhaust eeking out to the right in the wind. I can't really think of any improvements...it is a very pure image. unopened
newspaper Ooh, I really like this one. It reminds my of my gramps. I see a brown chair, which, following the death of the grandpa, now is used to hold mail, papers, grocery bags, etc. However, it used to hold the man who sorted through that mail, read that newspaper, etc. I also like the use of the word sits because it makes one think of a grandpa sitting in former days. To improve, I might say that unopened newspaper is a bit wordy. Wonder if there is any way to rephrase. Good haiku! empty house I like this
one too, though I would never leave any sort of food item uneaten if it
is already made. It's just not me. So, I had to think that
something pretty drastic forced these people to leave the food.
I kind of thought of a family fight, in which everyone had gotten anxious
and mad about dinner taking forever, so they all got really obnoxious
with each other. By the time it was done, they were all so mad that
they left. But, hopefully, I can find this house and eat this said
uneaten food before these people arrive home. To improve, I don't
really like the word "uneaten." Maybe "untouched"
or "immaculate." Who knows??? From Joe
Kramp: Football
Toss!,Sinking Canoe, Soft Rain,Empty House, Unopened Newspaper I like these
for two reasons...for the first several I like the unexpected humor or
light quality to the situation...Dad falling on the wabbly rock or the
car breaking down leading to tossing around the football. The rest
of them I really like because of the new, spring like, born again quality.
Lovers born again in the soft rain, the unoccupied rocking chair and the
Lazangna slowly cooling on the stove because no one is home...the expectation
in both of those is powerful. From Sarah
Lutz: "morning dew" - I love the picture this ppaints. I see an old leathery/tan looking man, completely at peace with himself and his life - up early and doing what he loves. "Ocean rain" - I like the ideas here...it paints a fresh picture, like the beginning of new love and new life as they are combined in the meeting of these two. "In the country" - I think this haiku is just really fun and I can see a bunch of guys on a road trip who don't care at all that their trip has been interrupted - they are just enjoying their time together and making the best of every situation presented to them. Paul Scherschel |
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Matt Whitsett's Haiku (Mom's favorites) I showed all of these to my mom because a lot of these came from experiences that I had as a kid growing up all the way through my college days. With all of them, she has been there for almost all of them and knows almost exactly what I was thinking and how I was feeling at the time of these experiences. uphill battle My mom really liked this one because she is the one who helped me learn to ride a bike and once I learned how to ride, I pedaled all around the neighborhood every single day from that day forward. The reason she related so well to this is because our neighborhood had two very steep hills, one steeper than the other, but both of which were extremely hard to reach the top without walking. She can remember me as a young child attempting to get up that hill and always having to walk about midway through it. Also, she remembers the first day I climbed the hill on my own without walking because I came home very excited and with a huge smile on my face. closed casket This one was also commented on by my mother because it reminds her of the funeral for my grandpa. Both of us were there with tears in our eyes as we saw someone we loved very much lay peacefully in the casket. She remembers being in the church and listening to all the people talk about how much of a good man he was, as tears ran down her face. I think we both agreed that most of the tears, although it was a sad day, were of joy because we knew he was in a better place and we knew how many good things people were saying of him. closet horrors The third of four haiku that were was commented on by my mom was this one due to the fact that I was scared of the monsters in my closet and under my bed. She can remember that almost every night I came into her room, running down the hallway and into her bed, trying to escape from the monsters in my closet. It seemed to her and me that as many times as she told me there weren't any monsters, I couldn't escape them because I would be in her bed the next night no matter what. She remembers always sharing the bed, covers and pillows, but knowing that it made me feel secure. in my car This is the final haiku that my mom liked. This one actually had nothing to do with me, for once. My mom is a big Tom Petty fan and every time she hears one of his songs, her mind is cleared of almost everything and she feels as if her life is clean of all the stress at least for that moment in time. Being in the car by yourself is a time where you can just sit back and think about things, but when a soothing song plays, it helps you relax a lot more, and that's why my mom liked this one so much because it captures that moment of relaxation in the car. smiling with
friends This one, although not really one of my favorites, was picked by one of my friends who says that it captures the moment of a party scene. Because he parties all the time, he related to this one very well and instantly thought of plenty of times in which he had drank all night until the sun came up the next morning. He says that it's about the best bonding time you can have with friends, staying up all night and talking about things while you're drinking. Although I disagree with him at least partially, he does make a good point about bonding and I'm glad he chose this one for that reason. Matt Whitsett |
on shaky
knee falling asleep arms wrapped
tightly When I gave my collection of haiku to my mother, grandmother and fiancé to read, the three of them all chose these three as their favorites. I must say I was a little bit surprised by this. I really feel that I am a much stronger writer when I am writing about nature as apposed to people and love, but apparently not. They really enjoyed the tenderness of these poems along with the way in which they are able to create not only an image but an emotion. I guess, when I think about it, that is a strength of mine as a writer. I always thought that nature was my strength but perhaps it is actual this, creating tender emotions through soft images. All three of them had the same reaction to these three, it created a soft picture, emotions and a memory. So, I guess I should continue to write about love through images. Christopher Bronke |
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we crack
beers On the last
day of spring break all of us went to the beach and watched the sun set.
I wrote this haiku on the spot and presented it to all the guys. They
loved it. They don't know much about haiku but they said that it perfectly
described the moment. Many of them have asked me to send it to them over
email so they can keep it. not quite
sunrise My friends
really responded well to this one. They said they can remember sitting
awake in their beds on Saturday morning before the sun even came up and
waited for the cartoons to come on. One even said he remembered watching
infomercials on Saturday mornings waiting for cartoons when he was a kid. hang over This was the final one that got a really good response from my friends. They said they could just imagine being so drunk on Mardi-Gras that they pass out with their clothes and beads still on. The next morning they wake up with a pounding headache and look in the mirror to find indents of the beads all down the side of their face. Bill Flowers |
Favorites from Friends and Family You cannot
describe the man without describing the setting. Somewhere deep in the
hills, off an ordinary dusty road, lives a man. He has raised two sons
to men, and put the third in the ground. He has lived his life from town
to town as only migrant workers can. Every day he goes into the fields
and he strings barbwire around his land. His hands are so thick and calloused
that not even the barbs can cut through. Every night he surrounds himself
with his family to play a round of cards and hunt down the flies that
sneak in through the screen door. And no matter how many years he has
left, he will live and die in those mountains.
yellowed
love letters your eyes
follow finger combing
my hair alone I sit Erin Osmus |
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Tricia Scholl I shared
some of my haiku over email with my brother Neil, my sister Kaylyn, my
cousin Kevin, and my cousin Julie. I sent Neil and Kaylyn 15 haiku that
I have written and then I sent Kevin and Julie my haibun and about 5 haiku.
Each were to respond back to me with 3 favorites and a short response
as to why. I sent my brother and my sister haiku that related to experience
they have had with me…such as growing up in our backyard and our
trips to wisconsin over several summers. I sent my cousin’s haiku
that they might put their own perspective into because it deals more with
my feelings than a place. Neil’s
responses: A table of
cards Tricia, this
one is my favorite because it reminds me of Grandma Shirley on our trips
to Wisconsin. Out of all the poems you sent me this one struck up the
clearest memory for me. The second poem I listed because it reminded me
of when I was younger and you know I love hotdogs! My third favorite is
just because I am a college student and I like beer. Haha. Just kidding.
Wheels turning
cold, wet
beer can Kaylyn’s
responses: Tiny arms Okay, this one I like because of Anna. All of us are so much bigger than her but everytime one of us comes through the door she runs to us like a bat out of hell and wraps her arms around our neck. She is so fun! God bowling I liked this
one too because, well, you know how much I HATE storms. And do you remember
mom always telling me it was just God bowling so I wouldn’t be afraid?
a
family phone call…to our marine brother so this one isn’t really my favorite but I chose it because I miss Steven. So I am a little biased but that’s okay. I just always look forward to talking to him. By the way, did he call you yesterday? Kevin’s
response: Graduation: Red toenails,
small feet New York
post card of summer Dreams of
tomorrow To play for
a little while Small grin
curls up cheeks I plant my
feet on the carpet As my spine
straightens Tricia- Out
of the stuff you emailed me I think I enjoyed this one the best because
we are both graduating in a few weeks. Its pretty descriptive and if I
know you well enough this one had a lot of your own feelings intertwined
into it. Can you believe it? We are graduating- oh boy. I basically chose
this one because out of all of the ones you sent me I could relate to
this one the most. Julie’s
response: Spring Fever my head slowly
falls hot pink
toe nails bluebirds
sing bikini clad
girls sand between
my toes sunglasses
on sun starts
to go down Hi! I really liked your “Graduation” haiku but I also like your “Spring Fever” one because I actually just got done laying out in the sun with Amy and mom, so I had to write about this one too, right ? Did you write this when you got back from spring break? Its very fun and I am feeling fun so that is why I will chose this one as my favorite. But I do really like the other ones you sent me too. Tricia Scholl |
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