EN340 / IN350 Global Haiku Tradition
Dr. Randy Brooks
Spring 2004
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Jennifer Toney

Thunderstorms
Kasen-no-renga

 

everyday our claps were . . .

Hand in Hand

by
Jennifer Toney

dedicated to my dear friend
and fellow haiku enthusiast

Haiku enthusiasts: Members of Dr. Brooks' Global Haiku class who not only love to write, read, and listen to haiku, yet take any opportunity to clap for and encourage others in the class with enthusiastic clapping being the primary function.

The title of this collection was inspired by my wonderful experience in the haiku class at Millikin University in the spring of 2004. With wonderful instruction, classmates and especially my fantastic group members, I truly had not only an educational experience, but was entertained every class period. Writing, reading, and experiencing haiku is something that I hope to continue throughout my life.

This collection of haiku poems was selected from a pool of work completed throughout the course. With inspiration from friends, past experiences, childhood, love, and nature, this collection travels throughout the time period of a year. While many of the poems have been edited by myself or as a collaboration with others, these haiku are original, and waiting to be born. I hope that you enjoy Hand in Hand . . .


Throughout my experience this semester writing haiku, I (along with my classmates) had the pleasure of learning from and working with Dr. Randy Brooks. His love and appreciation for the history of the art of haiku—the form and sensory appeal along with the imagery and structure is present in every class through his energy and obvious enjoyment in the material. We as a class have much to thank him for, for he has opened our minds, emotions and senses to haiku.

Lighting the spark within us, we as students are then left to mature into our own style. Despite my early attempts to continually follow the 5-7-5 syllable form, I found breaking free of set limitations and focusing on content to be much more satisfying. Whereas in my first attempts to write haiku, I knew exactly what moment I was attempting to portray, looking back now I see the need for clarification and editing. It is much easier now that I have an entire collection of over 40 haiku to see which poems are working, which are not, and why. Reading past work, I often find myself wondering "what was I talking about"?

I have been very lucky to have the assistance throughout this semester of friends, some who have taken the Global Haiku class and some who have not. They have been willing to not only listen to my rough efforts, but also to help me in the revision process. In this collection, many of the haiku contain lines that were edited or inspired by members of my group in class, my friend Paul Scherschel, and various residents of New Hall 2 at Millikin. I appreciate their comments, criticisms and their willingness to share.

Below are favorite picks from this collection as reviewed by friends, colleagues, haiku class group members all who were often inspirations for the colletion.


calm water
inflatable turtle
we drift

Reminds me of days sitting in my friend's pool . . . just chilling on a raft, letting the wind float us. Serene. ALWAYS been my favorite because it has such a calming mood, but then the picture of an inflatable turtle . . . as if there are a bunch of really serious poets around a pool or people meditating . . . and all the sudden, this bright green inflatable turtle comes around. —Emily Marshall, friend & resident


warm shower
washing away
my week's adventures


frightened children
hand in hand
returned to their beds


blankets snug
innocent sleep
holding her first love


my path to you
a tunnel of golden stalks
wind blowing my hair


drunken night
always my excuse
for staying with you


after the dance
the homecoming queen
eats cheerios . . . alone


2 am alarm clock
sounds of party girls
returning home


creamy nougat
spit into a napkin
49 more tries

How can you not like the word "nougat"?!?! And the "creamy" inserted right before it; it is like the perfect combination of words! I like the humor in this haiku (really more of a senryu) because it has the surprise element and the cutting technique displayed so well. It is a clever and very original haiku. I love it! —Molly Pufall, friend, haiku enthusiast, group member


sorting and folding
another season
packed away


season's first carwash
scrubbing away
my winter travels


freshly cut grass
the library swarming
with procrastination


worry     laughter    sadness
          moments of life
         etched in her face

I like the words in this haiku that allow me the freedom to paint a picture of what is really being said. A woman's face becomes more than just a face. The woman could be my grandmother. While reading this haiku, I can envision my grandma's face and think about all of the worries, laughter, and sadness that she has had in her life. The freedom to paint a mental picture of my own grandmother makes this haiku one of my favorites. —Paul Scherschel, friend & fellow haiku author

©2004 Randy Brooks, Millikin University, Decatur, Illinois || all rights reserved for original authors