at the party
people sing and dance
all night long
Brandon Januska |
friends having fun
I sit
on the bench
Adam Peters |
bare feet
soaking up
spring sun
Eve Greenwell |
I go to a park
and sit in silence
my favorite homework
Austyn Krueger |
friends having fun
I sit
on the bench |
bare feet
soaking up
spring sun |
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bare feet
soaking up
spring sun
top
quarter champion |
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TOP half Chamption
bare feet
soaking up
spring sun
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bottom
quarter champion
cigarette on the steps
honest Abe asks
for a light
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opening the door
on a couple
happily drunk
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cigarette on the steps
honest Abe asks
for a light
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opening the door
on a couple
happily drunk
Nicole Koch |
a quiet room to study
I hear the noise
from the boys next door
Lexy Bieber |
cigarette on the steps
honest Abe asks
for a light
Kendall Kott |
firm handshake the man with tender hands
Nic Sanders |
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TOP
half champion
bare feet
soaking up
spring sun
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CHAMPION
at the top of the world
I yodel
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at the top of the world
I yodel
BOTTOM
half champion |
102.2 fever
you still ask
about my day
Lexy Bieber |
sweat cools my forehead
I wipe the court
winning the game
Katelyn Rumph |
games you don't like
we play together
to spend time together
Nic Sanders |
on the wrong side
of the right bed
I'm still happy
Lexy Bieber |
102.2 fever
you still ask
about my day
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on the wrong side
of the right bed
I'm still happy |
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on the wrong side
of the right bed
I'm still happy
top
quarter champion |
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BOTTOM
half champion
at the top of the world
I yodel
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bottom
quarter champion
at the top of the world
I yodel
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lying in bed
wondering why
I put that picture there
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at the top of the world
I yodel
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crescent moon
shines a ray of light
on bad news
Nicole Koch |
lying in bed
wondering why
I put that picture there
Alex Cardascio |
at the top of the world
I yodel
Austyn Krueger |
the moon
crying out to me
I give into my passions
Eve Greenwell |
© 2015, Randy Brooks • Millikin University. All rights returned to authors upon publication.
at the party
people sing and dance
all night long
Brandon Januska |
friends having fun
I sit down
on the bench
Adam Peters |
bare feet
soaking up
spring sun
Eve Greenwell |
I go to a park
and sit in silence
my favorite homework
Austyn Krueger |
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opening the door
on a couple
happily drunk
Nicole Koch |
a quiet room to study
I hear the noise
from the boys next door
Lexy Bieber |
cigarette on the steps
honest Abe asks
for a light
Kendall Kott |
firm handshake the man with tender hands
Nic Sanders |
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102.2 fever
you still ask
about my day
Lexy Bieber |
sweat cools my forehead
I wipe the court
winning the game
Katelyn Rumph |
games you don't like
we play together
to spend time together
Nic Sanders |
on the wrong side
of the right bed
I'm still happy
Lexy Bieber |
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Besides both of these being good haiku, I liked that each one had a part of the poem that was negative, but yet the outcome still seemed to end positive. The first haiku was about playing games with someone who doesn’t like games, yet this person agrees to do it for the sake of spending time with a loved one. That is a beautiful, selfless act, and in the end, they both end up getting to see each other and have fun. In the other poem, I picture a couple that switched the sides of the bed that they sleep on. While at first it seems weird, the person the realizes that in the grand scheme of things it is not a big deal, as long as they are sharing a bed with this special person. Both haiku kind of give off that warm message that sometimes the little things don’t matter as long as the big picture turns out okay. Also, sometimes we sacrifice things for others we love. The language is simple in both of these, yet it gets the message across. This was a hard matchup because they are so similar and I liked both equally. The structure was similar, both having three lines. It was a good competition! Kendall |
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crescent moon
shines a ray of light
on bad news
Nicole Koch |
lying in bed
wondering why
I put that picture there
Alex Cardascio |
at the top of the world
I yodel
Austyn Krueger |
the moon
crying out to me
I give into my passions
Eve Greenwell |
I like this pairing. Both make me think of nighttime. I feel like you only consider these sort of things when you are very tired. Why else would you be lying in bed anyways? And the moon points to nighttime. They both point to unease. The both seem like very peacefully sad poems. Lexy |
I really liked both of these haiku and I thought that they fit well together. They both talk about being so overcome with emotion that you give in to your temptations. The first one gives the image of a person just enjoying the night and deciding to give in and truly enjoy the night without holding back. The second one deals with being so happy about how things are that they just can't hold back, so they yodel. Brandon |
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