Haiku to Edit 1 Variations

Global Haiku • Millikin University • Spring 2018

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quiet conversations
headphones in
finals week

whispered coversations
headphones draw me away
finals week

at the library
a conversation distracts
I put headphones on

finals week
headphones muffling
library conversations

finals week
headphones in
to block out quiet conversation

Silence
Finals Week
Soft Melodies

Quiet conversation.
No distraction . . . (headphones in)
Finals week.

finals week
a quiet conversation
pierces through headphones


a hill covered in snow
kids sliding down
rosie cheeks

kids sliding down
a snow covered hill
pure elation

sledding down
a snowy hill
rosie cheeks


sledding down the hill
always better
than climbing back up

sledding down
dreading
to climb back up

sledding down hill
trumps
climbing back up

Sledding Down
Always Better
Than climbing up


why am I alone
didn’t used to be
too late now

Alone?
Didn't used to be
Now what?

 

 


the wind
picks out
today's hairstyle

Todays hair style
The wind
Picks out

today's hair
styled
by the wind

hairstyle
tangled
by the wind


fall ball
metal baseball bat
stinging cold fingers

stinging cold fingers
against the metal bat
fall ball

metal bat
stinging my cold fingers
fall ball


flannel jacket, levi jeans
the farmer rushes to hide
the calf from the January Breeze

farmer's flannel
shields
the shivering calf

farmer rushes to
shield the calf
from the January Breeze


two braids
two ribbons
glasses

two ribbons
tied to two 
braids

two braids
tied in ribbons
glasses foggy

two braids tied by
two ribbons
glasses askew


it’s incredible
when you feel so inadequate
yet stand so tall

feeling inadequate
yet standing tall
beautiful paradox


handwritten note
a knowing smile
new butterflies

Smile
Handwritten note
Butterflies

butterflies
from a handwritten note
familiar handwriting

 

 


eerie moon
lonesome child shivering
lullabies sung

shivering child
snuggled lullabies
eerie moon

eerie moon
shivering child
gets no lullabies

eerie Moon
lonesome child shivering
AAHOOO

lonesome child
shivers
longing for lullabies


so cold
the covers are anchored
impossible to leave

anchored covers
enclosing my warmth
impossible to leave

frigid cold
anchored covers are
impossible to leave

anchored covers
enclosing my warmth
impossible to leave


why must one decide
what to do for the rest of their life
when they're only 18?

Big decisions
Shape the future
At a young age

decisions
for the rest of my life
at only 18

18 years old
choosing my own
life sentence


the blade is gliding
fascinated by her gracefulness
ice skating

graceful glide
of the blade
fascinate the fallen,

fascination
in her gracefulness--
figure skating


childrens' cheers
first recess
outside in months

first recess
cheerful
children

first recess of spring
children race
towards the swings

first recess
in months
children cheer

first recess
outside in months
children cheer

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


no worries but t-ball
kicking my feet through the dirt
good old days

no worries
kicking feet through dirt
t-ball

good old days
summer t-ball
kicking up the dirt

no worries
kicking my feet through the dirt
t-ball


ice covered paths
not easy with crutches
bruised ego

walk with a crutch
icy patch, leads to
bruised ego

icy paths
seem to laugh at my crutches
bruised ego

ice covered path
clumsy with crutches
bruises my ego


boo
at the
zoo

Characters mingle
With the animals
Boo at the zoo

costumed characters
mingle with the animals
boo at the zoo

zoo
what to do
boo


phone off
silence on
peaceful

silence on
step away from the phone
to find peace

screen down
silence surrounds
finally . . . peace

peaceful silence
no phone
just me

phone off
do not disturb
tranquil silence

phone off
don't want to be disturbed
in my peaceful silence


forgotten
stuck in the past
but still growing older

stuck in the past
forgotten memories
still growing older


continual circles
skates carving tracks
fixed by the Zamboni

ice skating evidence
erased by
Zamboni

skates etch
icy circles
the zamboni erases

infinite circles
carved by skates
Zamboni

infinite circles
stories told by skates
stories eliminated by Zamboni

skates carve
continuous circles
erased by Zamboni


© 2018, Randy Brooks • Millikin University
All rights returned to authors upon publication.