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Global Haiku • Millikin University • Spring 2018
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quiet conversations whispered coversations at the library finals week finals week Silence Quiet conversation. finals week |
a hill covered in snow kids sliding down sledding down |
sledding down the hill sledding down sledding down hill Sledding Down |
why am I alone Alone?
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the wind Todays hair style today's hair hairstyle |
fall ball stinging cold fingers metal bat |
flannel jacket, levi jeans farmer's flannel farmer rushes to |
two braids two ribbons two braids two braids tied by |
it’s incredible feeling inadequate |
handwritten note Smile butterflies
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eerie moon shivering child eerie moon eerie Moon lonesome child |
so cold anchored covers frigid cold anchored covers |
why must one decide Big decisions decisions 18 years old |
the blade is gliding graceful glide fascination |
childrens' cheers first recess first recess of spring first recess first recess
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no worries but t-ball no worries good old days no worries |
ice covered paths walk with a crutch icy paths ice covered path |
boo Characters mingle costumed characters zoo |
phone off silence on screen down peaceful silence phone off phone off |
forgotten stuck in the past |
continual circles ice skating evidence skates etch infinite circles infinite circles skates carve |
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