Haiku Attempts Seeking Responses & Editing Suggestions

English 340—Set 3, Summer 2002


the mother’s vase
totters
then falls to the floor

or

mother's vase
       totters
then falls to the floor

Shelley Mauer


the liquor was dandy
but didn’t last
HoW di D I

or

the liquor was dandy
but didn't last
HoW diD I

Bob Reed


moose running between
the road and
air force base fence

or

running between
the road and the air force base
mother and baby moose

Heather Aymer


summer
staring at bubbles
breaking in the soda pop


petunias bloom
in midday sun—
we wilt


everyone testing
shade trees
especially mosquitoes


the amish kids
watch their dog
jump in the car

or

he leaps into the car
eager for a ride
the amish kids' dog

or

he leaps into the car
eager for a ride
the amish dog

Cindy


from the library
pay phone
no date tonight


she had to save
that doll . . .
and the others

Bob Reed


the bus grunts and shutters
before it starts
—long road trip


an easter cake
left out to cool
a squirrel's treat


bedtime stories
a little white dog
in the eyes of children


**********AUTO **
A. Squirrel
and A squirrel and a Squirrel
circling, the trunk


he speaks with
great urgency
to her mirrored sunglasses

Bob Reed


firing up the grill
too too hot
to cook indoors


family reunion picnic
overheated aunts and uncles
and ants


waiting . . .
the cup of tea
no longer warm in my hand

or

the cup of tea
become cold
waiting

or

the cup of tea
no longer warm
waiting

or

waiting for sunrise
a cup of tea
cold in my hand

or

waiting . . .
the cup of tea
no longer warm

Shelley Mauer


alone
after yoga practice
the train rumbles by

or

alone
the train rumbles by
after yoga practice

or

after yoga practice
the train's rumble
softens

Shelley Mauer


© 2002, Randy Brooks • Millikin University
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