Alternate form edits

Original

echo of thunder—
black clouds somersault
not high above

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black clouds somersault
not high above
     echo of thunder

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echo of thunder
     as black clouds somersault—
          not high above

or

echoes of thunder—
     not high above
black clouds somersault

original

down the alley
stray cats compare their
hiding places

or

stray cats
compare their hiding places
     down the alley

or

comparing their hiding places
down the alley—
stray cats

or

down the alley
stray cats compare hiding places

original

he pulls the bee stinger
from her white foot
old married couple

or

from her white foot
     he pulls the stinger
          old married couple

or

old married couple—
he pulls the bee stinger
     from her white foot

or

he pulls the stinger
     from her old white foot—
          married couple

Bob Reed