Haiku Writing Roundtable--Fall 2004
birdsong • • Abby Kavanaugh |
baby's first Thanksgiving • • • • Lea Evers I chose this one because I can just see my 2 year old niece doing this when she was younger. Especially since she was only 2 months old at her first Thanksgiving. Alicia Scott |
bobber glistens • • • • • • Rick Bearce I chose to write about this haiku because I like that it approaches fishing from a different direction and doesn't say it outright. The fact that the bobber on the water is the first thing that you see, allows you to know what is going on without a blatant statement. I also love the final image of the fisherman sleeping. He obviously hasn't gotten a bite in awhile. Katie Steimann |
walking through • • • • • Jenn Van Natta |
at the party • • • Katie Steimann |
hot
breath • • Joanne Weise |
chocolate martinis |
before
the concert • Katie Steimann |
peeing behind a bush • • Emily Evans |
the bartender • • • Jenn Van Natta i chose this haiku to respond on because it opened a situation in my mind. there is a lot in this haiku, but said very subtly. the author was obviously observing the bartender... but was the author alone, and therefore had no one to talk to, so therefore watching the bartender? Was the bartender bored, and cleaning everything? Maybe it was a slow night, and the author is one of the only people in the bar? There are great undertones in this haiku, with enough empty space for questions. It is observant, and has a sabi sense of loneliness. The money you paid for a beer was worth the creation of this poem. Emily Evans |
the
open window • • Nichole Johnson |
moonlight enters • • • Rick Bearce |
garage sale: • • • Emily Evans This one is my favorite of this kukai. I absolutely love garage sales, but it's a much different twist to think of what the item(s) you're about to buy meant to someone long ago. Maybe the meaning is still there, maybe it's not, but either way, the ones having the garage sale are watching a piece of themselves be sold away. Wonderful image. Joanne Weise I love this haiku because of the sentimentality I feel from it. The person is selling plates they thought meant nothing to them, but maybe realizes when someone else wants them that they shouldn't be getting rid of them... but too late now! It has a calm feeling about it also... I picture this happening very slowly; the words even read slowly. Jenn Van Natta |
on the calendar • • • • Nichole Johnson |
cigarette
break • Regan Bledsaw |
orange
cones • Joanne Weise |
Santa
ho ho's • Nichole Johnson |
almost ready • • • • • • • Regan Bledsaw This haiku reminds me of my mother. We have three hunting dogs who have become more like house dogs the older they get. Last Christmas, my mom insisted that I put one of those reindeer antler headbands on each dog and take a picture to send the relatives or put in Christmas cards. Needless to say, the dogs were not terribly thrilled about the antlers. The whole idea of the dogs in sweaters to be photographed reminds me of something my mom would do to our dogs. Rick Bearce |
my
father • • Lea Evers |
light touches • • • Lea Evers I really like this haiku. It manages to convery so much sadness without saying it directly. I see the flag as being the one given to a family of a fallen soldier. It's kept and grieved over, but finally put into the drawer as the family tries to move on. But everyonce in a while, the drawer gets opened and when it does, it reminds the family of their gried. It's a very beautiful haiku. Nichole Johnson |
resting on the sidewalk • • • • Emily Evans |
you never knew I watched you • • • Regan Bledsaw This is one of my favorites out of this kukai. It’s so emotionally charged, you can’t help but be drawn into the haiku. You can really envision the scene. A boyfriend leaving the words that he’s too upset to say out loud. Not being at all surprised by his cover up prior to that moment. Watching but not interrupting. It’s so true about relationships. When you’ve gone as far as either of you can in the relationship, and both sides realize it, there’s nothing more to do but grieve and go on separately. So many images packed into such a powerful little haiku. Beautiful. Abby |
surrounded
by family • • Alicia Scott |
opening the blinds • • • • Abby Kavanaugh |
in the bar • • • • Jenn Van Natta |
a flag slowly lowers • • • Alicia Scott |
Christmas
morning • • • • Rick Bearce |
Japan House Tea Ceremony Haiku |
at the tea ceremony • Katie Steimann |
winter
evening . . . • kg Randy Brooks |
simple tea bowl • • • • • • • kg Emily Evans |
smooth yet precise motions
|
in the small tea room • • Katie Steimann |
without
a word kg Emily Evans |
whisking the tea • Randy Brooks |
cleaning the spoon • • • Emily Evans |
before, after • • Randy Brooks something has happened here. but it looks the same. just like returning to an airport. great realization. Emily Evans |
slowly preparing tea • • • • kg Emily Evans |
bowing
to enter • • Randy Brooks |
she bows • Katie Steimann |
quietly
watching • Lea Evers |
tokonoma
haiku . . . • • kg Randy Brooks |
release
of emotion, |
sitting Indian-style on the hard floor forgetting my ankles hurt |
drinking tea . . . but not before an apology bow |
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2004, Randy Brooks Millikin University
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