front door steps
nervously waiting upon . . .
what I’ve been waiting for
Alysa Doneske |
do you remember
that time
you said the three words
Dan Dolphin |
he speaks
my mind goes blank
while I apologize
Emily Boes |
my tiny hand
wrapped in hers
squeezing
Emily Boes |
front door steps
nervously waiting upon . . .
what I’ve been waiting for
|
he speaks
my mind goes blank
while I apologize |
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front door steps
nervously waiting upon . . .
what I’ve been waiting for
top
quarter champion |
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TOP half Chamption
I see you driving
with the boy I love
and I am like . . . HAIKU!
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bottom
quarter champion
I see you driving
with the boy I love
and I am like . . . HAIKU!
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I see you driving
with the boy I love
and I am like . . . HAIKU!
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a familiar smell
takes her back . . .
a cemetery
|
screen illuminates on my face
waiting for a reply
. . . i fear i’ve been ghosted
Dan Dolphin |
I see you driving
with the boy I love
and I am like . . . HAIKU!
Raisa Zamacona |
a familiar smell
takes her back . . .
a cemetery
Alysa Doneske |
throwing her necklace into the casket
Emily Boes |
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TOP
half champion
I see you driving
with the boy I love
and I am like . . . HAIKU!
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Page Champion & GRAND CHAMPION
the rainbow stands as if you are here
|
the rainbow stands as if you are here
BOTTOM
half champion |
the crack in the cave
projects moonlight
on your face
Dan Dolphin |
sparks
gazing on a smile
lights a fire
Emily Boes |
warm sun
soft lips
pressed against mine
Emily Boes |
a sudden kiss
frightens her soul
a teardrop forms
Alysa Doneske |
the crack in the cave
projects moonlight
on your face |
warm sun
soft lips
pressed against mine |
|
the crack in the cave
projects moonlight
on your face
top
quarter champion |
|
BOTTOM
half champion
the rainbow stands as if you are here
|
bottom
quarter champion
the rainbow stands as if you are here
|
his secret lover
speaks out
to Her
|
the rainbow stands as if you are here
|
his secret lover
speaks out
to Her
Alysa Doneske |
sweatshirt
stolen from a man
I never loved
Emily Boes |
summer storm
with you by my side
everything will be alright
Raisa Zamacona |
the rainbow stands as if you are here
Raisa Zamacona |
© 2019, Randy Brooks • Millikin University. All rights returned to authors upon publication.
LED lights
illuminating our dinner
mariachi band
Emily Boes |
the disco ball
spins in a rotation
lights on the dance floor
Dan Dolphin |
message in a bottle
taken by the tide
Where am I?
Raisa Zamacona |
Guitar strings
a song played
long long
ago
Emily Boes |
the disco ball
spins in a rotation
lights on the dance floor |
message in a bottle
taken by the tide
Where am I? |
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message in a bottle
taken by the tide
Where am I?
top
quarter champion |
|
TOP half Chamption
deep lake
painted red with sunrise
coffee’s warmth
|
bottom
quarter champion
deep lake
painted red with sunrise
coffee’s warmth
|
deep lake
painted red with sunrise
coffee’s warmth
|
when life shuts a door
just open it!
it is a door
|
the water fills my throat
as my lips
touch the glass
Dan Dolphin |
deep lake
painted red with sunrise
coffee’s warmth
Emily Boes |
tinder
an online romance
don’t do it
Raisa Zamacona |
when life shuts a door
just open it!
it is a door
Raisa Zamacona |
|
TOP
half champion
deep lake
painted red with sunrise
coffee’s warmth
|
|
PAGE CHAMPION
metallic footsteps
sound through the door
strangers laugh
|
metallic footsteps
sound through the door
strangers laugh
BOTTOM
half champion |
the photo booth takes our picture
snap
your lips press on my cheek
Dan Dolphin |
cool shade
draws the attention—
a bystander
Alysa Doneske |
the children run
before I blow the whistle
a child slips
Dan Dolphin |
metallic footsteps
sound through the door
strangers laugh
Emily Boes |
the photo booth takes our picture
snap
your lips press on my cheek |
metallic footsteps
sound through the door
strangers laugh |
|
metallic footsteps
sound through the door
strangers laugh
bottom champion |
|
front door steps
nervously waiting upon . . .
what I’ve been waiting for
Alysa Doneske |
do you remember
that time
you said the three words
Dan Dolphin |
he speaks
my mind goes blank
while I apologize
Emily Boes |
my tiny hand
wrapped in hers
squeezing
Emily Boes |
These poems are a good pair because they are both about recalling something from the past. The first poem talks about how they have been waiting for this moment and they are nervous the second is more direct and the reader is asking if they remember their love. I like them because they both give the reader a giddy feeling. Maybe the second poem is about getting back an old lover. Maybe they are trying to make them recall a time when they loved one another. The first poem is about somebody who is trying to get somebody to like them. They are at their door waiting for them. They are possibly going to ask them out. I think this pair goes good together because the it makes the reader feel like they have a connection with somebody, and it is easy to put yourself in the poem. Dan Dolphin, June 2019 |
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|
screen illuminates on my face
waiting for a reply
. . . i fear i’ve been ghosted
Dan Dolphin |
I see you driving
with the boy I love
and I am like . . . HAIKU!
Raisa Zamacona |
a familiar smell
takes her back . . .
a cemetery
Alysa Doneske |
throwing her necklace into the casket
Emily Boes |
the crack in the cave
projects moonlight
on your face
Dan Dolphin |
sparks
gazing on a smile
lights a fire
Emily Boes |
warm sun
soft lips
pressed against mine
Emily Boes |
a sudden kiss
frightens her soul
a teardrop forms
Alysa Doneske |
his secret lover
speaks out
to Her
Alysa Doneske |
sweatshirt
stolen from a man
I never loved
Emily Boes |
summer storm
with you by my side
everything will be alright
Raisa Zamacona |
the rainbow stands as if you are here
Raisa Zamacona |
LED lights
illuminating our dinner
mariachi band
Emily Boes |
the disco ball
spins in a rotation
lights on the dance floor
Dan Dolphin |
message in a bottle
taken by the tide
Where am I?
Raisa Zamacona |
Guitar strings
a song played
long long
ago
Emily Boes |
the water fills my throat
as my lips
touch the glass
Dan Dolphin |
deep lake
painted red with sunrise
coffee’s warmth
Emily Boes |
tinder
an online romance
don’t do it
Raisa Zamacona |
when life shuts a door
just open it!
it is a door
Raisa Zamacona |
I think that these two matches are very good together because they both set a mood. In the second one you can paint a picture in your mind at where you are and the setting it brings to your mind. In the other it is just like a snapshot of what is happening. They both have to do with someone drinking something or putting something up to ones mouth. One would say there is some contrast within each of them because coffee is usually hot and water you would usually drink cold. Lips are usually red and that ties into the sunrise part of the second haiku which I really like. Alysa Doneske, June 2019 |
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|
the photo booth takes our picture
snap
your lips press on my cheek
Dan Dolphin |
cool shade
draws the attention—
a bystander
Alysa Doneske |
the children run
before I blow the whistle
a child slips
Dan Dolphin |
metallic footsteps
sound through the door
strangers laugh
Emily Boes |
the crack in the cave
projects moonlight
on your face
Dan Dolphin |
warm sun
soft lips
pressed against mine
Emily Boes |
warm sun
soft lips
pressed against mine
Emily Boes |
metallic footsteps
sound through the door
strangers laugh
Emily Boes |
I really like the paring of the two of these because of the contrast in color and temperature. The temperature in the first one is cool, since the two of them are in a cave in the middle of the night. However, the same warm sentiments stand, since they’re paying attention to each other’s faces. In the second one, all the colors are warm, and so is the temperature. This color and temperature matches the warmth that the other one uses as a juxtaposition. What makes them a good pair is that both of them feature the same warm feeling of looking at or touching the face of someone you love. It really does melt away everything around you, like how in the second one all the external sensory information you get is warm sun, and in the second one all you get is the fact there’s a cave and the moonlight is filtering through. In both, the focus is on the other person, and that provides a sense of warmth regardless of time of day or location. Emily Boes, June 2019 |
I chose this haiku because when I read it, the first thing that came to my mind is how it feels when the sun hits your skin and that cozy warmth of it. I can see colorful trees and smell the flowers while the birds are singing. A woman might be at a park sitting on a bench watching couples walk past her. She has her attention on a couple who is seated not too far away from her and with all what she is feeling at that moment she is imagining how her now dead husband’s lips used to feel when he pressed them against hers. Raisa Zamacona, June 2019
Thge second one can be matched with the other because what I am thinking is the woman on the bench heads home to her kids, she has had a long day at work but her smiles never fails when she is around her loved ones. She opens the door to her house and her kids immediately know it is her mom because of the metallic footsteps sound that come from her heels. The laughs that her mom can hear are different, stranger than usual… they don’t come from her kids but are still nice to hear because the sound of someone’s laugh indicates happiness. Raisa Zamacona, June 2019 |