Haiku to Edit 1

Global Haiku • Millikin University • Spring 2012

Editing processes: cut, add, replace (cut & add), & rearrange
Revision tips: establish context, don't explain, phrasing (not lists) & watch out for plurals.

 

a snowflake falls
onto the fresh dirt
a woman’s grave

determined eyes
his arms pumping
body builder

gentle breezes
through the window
so many crickets

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

hide and seek
hello and goodbye
fresh book unworn pages

time passes
I am not as carefree as
I thought I was

the first of many
new faces
smiling eagerly

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

fluorescent flares
starry night
disappears

reluctant to let go
raindrops
slide down my cheek

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2012, Randy Brooks • Millikin University
All rights returned to authors upon publication.