Haiku
Society of America Midwest Haiku Retreat
Minneapolis, Minnesota
Midwest
Haiku Retreat
June 11-13, 2000
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by
Hayat Abuza
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Second
1999 HSA Quarterly Meeting June 11-13, 1999, Minneapolis, MN
The
Second 1999 HSA Quarterly Meeting was held June 11-13, 1999 at Wilder
Forest, a wooded retreat center near Minneapolis, Minn.
Midwest
Regional Coordinator Randy Brooks teamed up with Jeanne Emrich to
organize the Midwest Haiku Writers Retreat with an emphasis on doing
haiku-related activities.
The
retreat featured: haiku readings, collaborative linked haiku writing,
editing haiku, painting haiga, ginkô haiku walks, judging
haiku, and a closing discussion about approaches to haiku journals.
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As we discovered
at the opening introductions, the retreat attracted a variety
of participants from across the United States, including HSA members
from Connecticut, Massachusetts, Pennsylvania, California, Nebraska,
Illinois, Michigan, Iowa, and, of course, Minnesota.
Several participants
came with partners, often based on previous collaborations between
artists and haiku poets, perhaps attracted to our advertised workshop
on haiga painting.
The participants
ranged in experience from scholars and longtime haiku writers
to beginners, which made for excellent exchanges throughout the
weekend.
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Paul
O. Williams, President of HSA, (in the photo above with Dr. Brooks)
was the featured speaker on Friday evening. He shared an investigation
of human knowledge about the moon, and how haiku writers have captured
the lunar significance to our lives. His talk included more than
a hundred excellent lunar haiku, including several by Robert Mainone,
one of the retreat participants:
every
dog in its spell
this winter night's
full moon
One
of the joys of haiku is the exactness of observation captured by
haiku poets. Paul blended the scientific with the literary knowledge
of the moon to show that we are always seeking to understand those
things we live with. Following the moon presentation, all participants
shared haiku in extended rounds of haiku reading. A few participants
stayed up late Friday night learning how to write rengay, following
the guidance of Paul Williams and Randy Brooks.
Here
is a rengay written by Paul O. Williams, Hal Barron and Horst Ludwig:
Burning
Behind Glass
Burning
behind glass
a fire not needed
not warming us Paul
How
brittle is the ice!
Foot steps crunch the hard snow. Hal
Sailboats
on the lake.
People swimming for fun,
screaming, laughing
Horst
On
the shore a man,
sunglasses, tanned, muscular,
looking around Horst
In
this summer's heat
the greenhouse left wide open Paul
The
circus is in town.
Elephants
tramp the dirt road.
Moon on the horizon. Hal
After
breakfast Saturday morning, we gathered on the deck of the lodge
for a haiku editing workshop. Prior to the retreat, participants
sent haiku to Lee Gurga to be edited in this workshop, so he had
time to prepare a variety of editing experiences for us. He began
by picking on his good friend and long time haiku-editing buddy,
Randy Brooks, who contributed this haiku for editing suggestions:
cool
evening . . .
my mother takes my arm
from grave to grave
Deliberately
misreading this haiku attempt Lee asked me, "Randy, why is
your mother carrying your arm from grave to grave?" And all
of the participants began working on ways to fix this haiku:
arm
in arm,
my mother takes me
from grave to grave
cool
evening . . .
mother draws me
from grave to grave
I
promised to share a final version with them the next morning and
came up with this rendering after a joke about my mother "pulling
my leg" from grave to grave:
cool
evening . . .
mother takes me by the arm
from grave to grave
Another
example from the editing workshop is the following revision by Ann
Brown, one of the newcomers to haiku at the retreat:
Storm
rolling in
Sky darkens and quakes
Light surrounds me.
The
night sky darkens
storm rolling in
light surrounds me
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After
the haiku editing workshop, Jeanne Emrich presented a history
of haiga, complete with slide exhibits. Basic principles of expressive
creation and complementary connections between the poetry and
painting were emphasized (in contrast to Western concepts of illustration
and description). Jeanne also showed us the wide range of approaches
taken by various writers and painters, both from Japanese history
and in contemporary works by living artists.
After
the extensive presentation, we moved to the Wilder Forest studios
to try our hands at haiga painting. Jeanne provided quality brushes,
examples, books, paints and a chop (and red cinnabar) we could
share for our works. Several of the resulting haiga can be viewed
on the Web.
Here
is a haiga by Randy Brooks created at the painting workshop:
http://www.brooksbookshaiku.com/warmcreekhaiga.html
The
studio remained open until Saturday evening for those who wanted
to continue working on haiga. Most of the haiga were posted on
the lodge walls so that they could be enjoyed until the end of
the retreat. On Sunday morning, we voted on favorites, and Jeanne
led a critical discussion appreciating various works. Jeanne's
haiga of snow on the stair steps and Hayat Abuza's delicate feathers
haiga were the favorites.
We
were also treated to a slide show of photography and haiku Saturday
evening by calendar collaborators, Gretchen Batz and Nancy Wiley,
from Elsah, Ill.
On
Saturday afternoon, Horst Ludwig, Associate Professor of German
at Gustavus Adolphus College, gave a comprehensive one-hour presentation
on the history of haiku by German poets. Horst's presentation
was thoroughly researched and appropriately critical of the writers,
editors, magazines, and anthologies of German haiku from the turn
of the century to contemporary times. The main literary obstacle
to writing haiku in a language other than Japanese appears to
be that the poets are, of course, always attempting to continue
their own Western concepts of poetic work (and these concepts
are often at odds with the Eastern aesthetics and approaches espoused
by the Japanese haiku tradition). Horst showed how the German
poets have wrestled with Romanticism and the ego-less poetics
championed by the haiku tradition.
In
the late afternoon, the retreat folks participated in a ginkô,
hiking trails leading through the 1,200 acres of woods and around
the glacial lakes. Several participants saw a turtle laying eggs
on an esker between the lakes and shared these moments during
a retreat reading roundtable. Here are some of the first draft
haiku resulting from the ginkô. The first is by Lee Gurga
and the second by Charlie Trumbull:
summer meadow
the painted turtle
lays another egg
summer afternoon
a cottonwood fluff
floats straight down
Randy
Brooks led the group through a method of judging haiku by discussing
matched pairs of haiku. This method of haiku criticism dates back
to haiku competitions judged by Bashô. Although we called
this method "matching walnut shells" as a Midwestern
term, it is more typically associated with "matching seashells,"
a game played by Japanese girls.
On
Sunday morning, Randy led the group through a discussion of the
haiku from the ginkô, arranged in matched pairs by Lee Gurga.
The favorite haiku from the ginkô competition was another
turtle haiku by Hayat Abuza:
on
the turtle's back
a spatter of grass clippings
and a gnat at rest
Charlie's
"cottonwood fluff" haiku received second place. Both
winners of the ginkô competition received a book of their
choice from Brooks Books.
On
Sunday morning, after selecting the awards for the ginkô
and haiga, we had another delightful round of haiku reading on
the deck of the lodge. Then perhaps the best event of the entire
retreat occurred. We had about an hour before we needed to pack
up, so everyone simply went into an open-ended discussion about
writing haiku, keeping haiku journals, why do some people write
haiku as sentences, and so forth. It was a great conclusion to
the retreat!
Randy
Brooks, Midwest Region Coordinator
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